Thought I’d give it another try at promoting my own poems. So here it goes, a poem I wrote last Summer after getting kicked out of a medical ethics seminar for being asleep. The doctor got pissed for no actual reason and got himself into a nasty chain reaction which ended up with me being called back and then given a lecture in good manners and then out again. The lines “Lost all save his perception, of all that makes him numb” were the first 2 lines to be written and they came to me while being lectured 🙂
The name of the poem as written in my notebook is “Mask Fall” but I can’t remember why I titled it like this or what the heck the name means.
A seat between the landmines
Swallowed by fog of war
Thirst for a bomb to just shine
And stop the deafening roar
The masked death in the windblow
The searing poisoned rain
Your face against the sin flow
Crushed under thoughts of pain
The friendly fire maelstrom
The bottled frenzy stomps
The lust within, where hate’s from
Blown like a thousand bombs
The master of deception
Tricked by a drunken bum
Lost all save his perception
Of all that makes him numb
The light after a black night
Shattered by darker thoughts
Entwined seemed souls in daylight
While silent shadows fought
Hail death when it goes calling
When we applaud and sing
When souls and bodies falling
Signal return of spring
July 11th, 2007
(not revised yet so keep your corrections to yourselves)
even though i dont understand much about poems , but urs seemed good, and what makes it sound good is that i didnt get the point.
so really my comment is worthless.